Years 1 try to write about the Universe in….. 5 sentences!
"The Universe is magnificent and it started off as a tiny speck. It was created 14,000,000,000 years back. When the Big Bang happened we were formed.
Herbie Yr1
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Some fantastic word choices, Herbie. Mrs Shaw
Herbie, excellent work. I love your use of the word ‘magnificent! Rod GG
"When Thia crashed in to the Earth it made everything! The moon was created as well. Shooting stars are very rare because there are not many of them. Before the Big Bang the universe was very quiet. The moon was created about the same time as the Sun. the first alive things were germs".
Rowan, Yr1
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You’ve done really well with this writing about the Universe Story! Mrs Shaw
Wow! What fantastic writing Rowan, I’m really impressed. I really like how you say it was quiet before the Big Bang. Rod, GG
Herbie Yr1
comments
Some fantastic word choices, Herbie. Mrs Shaw
Herbie, excellent work. I love your use of the word ‘magnificent! Rod GG
"When Thia crashed in to the Earth it made everything! The moon was created as well. Shooting stars are very rare because there are not many of them. Before the Big Bang the universe was very quiet. The moon was created about the same time as the Sun. the first alive things were germs".
Rowan, Yr1
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You’ve done really well with this writing about the Universe Story! Mrs Shaw
Wow! What fantastic writing Rowan, I’m really impressed. I really like how you say it was quiet before the Big Bang. Rod, GG
